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In front of my house, he sat.
Skin burnt off, now charred and black.

Hesitantly, I walked outside.
And he followed me with his watery eyes.

With steps as nimble as the snow,
I hid my fear and continued to go.

Now before him, the Burning Man.
I kindly offered him my shaky hand.

No malice nor vice leaked off of him,
rather sadness and agony which simmered below his skin.

I could feel it around me, the pain and despair,
yet, physically the man was nearly repaired.

For his scorched skin was not his problem,
instead the bottled emotions that devoured all of him.

“Would you like to come inside sir, and stay?”
In which he replied by looking away.

Again I asked, and received no reply,
and was startled when the man began to cry.

Unsure of what to do, I walked away,
Yet I’ll never forget what happened that day.

Be it from pain, or mute, or undisclosed desires,
I watched as the man was engulfed in fire.

I stood back in awe, with my mouth agape,
and feared that he had fallen into the Pit of Hate.

Yet no devil was he, as far as I could tell,
his soul was pure, and not one of hell.

And years later, I look back and think,
that perhaps he was the same as you and me.

With pain bottled within, and afraid to tell,
the world how he felt, in fear that they'd yell.

So he kept it within, until it burned him from inside,
and slowly and painfully I watched him die.

And now, I promise the next time I see,
a Burning Man, sitting before me.

Come Hell or High water, i'll drag him inside,
and become the friend in which he can truly confide.

Never again shall I loose him to death,
for the burning man represents many of my friends.

Who've nearly lost the battle between life and death,
and silently begged for their untimely rest.

Perhaps, we're Burning Men, you and me,
waiting for a gentle soul to set us free.

However, our silent lips will never tell,
until our agony drags us to hell.

So I ask of you, friend or foe,
to look for the pain, that refuses to show.

Within a Burning Man, and hopefully you'll see,
that he is withering in his own agony.

I look back on that day, even now,
and perhaps, I could have turned his life around,

But the Burning Man, will forever remain,
a dream that haunts me, and calls my name.

And still, He sits there, in front of my house,
his eyes ever trained, body as still a mouse,

We stare at each other, the Burning Man and I,
and forever, I will attempt, to bring him inside.

Come Hell or High water, i'll drag him inside,
and become the friend in which he can truly confide.
I dreamed of this years ago, a man who was burning, sitting in front of my house with crystal blue eyes, just tearing up and staring. I offered to let him inside, stuck my hand out, and he said nothing, just stared and watched as I went back inside. When I dream, I feel a sort of emotion invoked within it, and around this time, I was dealing with a friend who had nearly killed himself, and was contemplating on doing it again, so this probably sparked my dream. 
How many of our friends have we watched suffer, yet said nothing about? How many of them are Burning Men? 
When we see someone struggling, or even suspect someone is contemplating suicide, please reach out!
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primalfuryan Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Professional General Artist
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lidsworth Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Sorry for the late response, but thank you so much!
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thredd Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
i am really glad i came across this today.
i can't believe this was a dream and this was something you were experiencing
and you had the capacity to write a concise poem/ about.
this is both helpful, true and well done.

what you have done throughout so nicely in this write

and i am - well i didn't mean to write so many words already
very comforted to read this
i am not
"the burning man"
obviously
but it feels like it.
the burning man who came back inside 
that is how important this is
this is super cool.

i hope others enjoy this as well
"find something to take with them"
keep up your great writing
your heart is super insightful and open uh aware and  supercool.
i must sound like a kid. i'm not.
so glad i read this.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
It's heard to discern the pain that people suffer everyday, because in this age, i believe we've all just been so used to it, that we're usually concerned just about ourselves. And for those of us who aren't, we don't know how to help others all that well. Anyway, thanks for the comment!
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thredd Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student General Artist
absolutely!

we can always keep trying to be open to be helpful-concerned for others and to be helped by others and allow them to be concerned for us -
even in little ways.
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Chipgon Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I love it
very touchful and meanful
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
thank you! 
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Chipgon Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Yw ! :la:
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Micithemisterious Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
thank you. 
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RadiantGloom Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student General Artist
This is so powerful. I honestly don't even know what to say
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks!
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
I think this is a testament that we sometimes are afraid of people because of how they look. You know, we may see someone that may look mean or ugly, and we try avoiding them without realizing it, instead of being kind to them. Wonderful poem. :)
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks!
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IdeaDG Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
*ahem* Fantastic Four....fuck you
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, Justice League is DC, but thanks for pointing our the simularity! I never saw that! But accept, he's not on fire in this one, his skin is sizzling off. 
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IdeaDG Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Burning man? Pffft, perhaps he is just the Human Torch from the Justice League.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Marvel! Geez!
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diestarlyt666 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
hholllyyyy shit. you read my mind ^.^ this is so deep
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
;D
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NeykaSoul Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so deep. I never ever thought about it, but it could be really true. You opened my eyes buddy. This is very very well done and really great work. :)
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I'm glad I helped open your eyes! Thanks!
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sturnella-neglecta Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I just want to say thank you for writing this. I have been in situations where I could have helped but backed off because I didn't want to get involved and this inspired me to help others no matter the personal implications. 
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, I think we've both been in similar situations, and now i've made a personal pledge to help anyone who I can. 
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SasuXLove Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow,this is great~
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks alot! I'm really glad you like it!
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TosoTamashi Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WAAA??? plz 
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
:D
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TosoTamashi Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I couldn't find the words to describe how wonderful this was, so I posted my reaction instead Fool Emoji-21 (Sexy Dance) [V1] 
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CarthageNut Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is an incredible piece of writing. "And now, I promise the next time I see, a Burning Man, sitting before me. Come Hell or High water, i'll drag him inside, and become the friend in which he can truly confide." Is a truly beautiful part. I want that to be my motto for life.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you, and I loved that line a lot too! Feel free to share the poem if you'd like to, I hope others find it as encouraging as you do. 
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CarthageNut Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I definitely will. This is such a terrific poem, more people need to hear it.
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Valamon Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Not sure what the Precipitous120 person even means by coming off as the poem is not good.

I don't think it has anything to do with the length. If it were any shorter, it would not portray as well the message that it is trying to give. And the 'real art' part is in the poem itself, to learn of this person sitting and burning from their own bottled emotions, waiting for someone to coax them to finally release it all.

I think it hits home for me in a way for a few reasons. My sister has dealt with a similar situation, as she has always had a hard time expressing emotions to people, she had come to self-harm to release the pain.  And I have stayed up before coaxing a friend out of contemplated suicide.  And I myself sometimes feel as if bottled emotions have set my insides on fire.

Forgive my rambling. I find it a very lovely poem and the point is easy to see. I like that better than one of the harder to discern ones as I am not very good at understanding poetry.

- Val
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you for the comment. And yeah, like you I can relate, trying to stop a friend from hurting themselves or committing suicide happens to be one of the hardest things. They either listen to your advice, or completely ignore it. And when you don't do anything, you're always thinking, "What could I have done better?"

But thanks!
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Valamon Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem!
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Very beautiful!!!!  Fantastic job!!
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you! 
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
You're very welcome, it was very emotional and moving!!!
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
I read this to about half way point then figured that it's just not gripping enough for me to carry on reading so I went to the next page. Then I came back after I thought to myself, maybe this is why people don't read my poems, because they are just not gripping enough... but then I though, you know what, I'm not going to read this poem, if it isn't good I shouldn't be guilting myself into reading it. Then a further thought came to me, you know what, before I was any good at poetry I really really sucked... so why should I just leave this page with out warning the person that they are really not that good and that's why people aren't leaving as many messages as views.

So what I have to say about your poem is that it isn't very good because.

It's too long, people what to see your view point from the beginning to the end.
It has only story to tell, no real art about it.... it's just like you are speaking... 
You use common over used sayings instead of making your own.
your end is basically already stated in the mid point.

You conclusion should be a shock, something that finishes of your poem with a high point, a real conclusion or climax.

Well, cheers, your poem is good in that it has a message to tell, I see some people fail to do that as well
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
But thanks for the advice.
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Excuse me if I come off rude, but just because you don't like something does not make it "rubbish". So please refrain from calling my work trash. I too have been writing for a long time, and can discern rubbish from poetry. And you do realize that the number of comments don't always determine your skill as a writer. And as far as comments go, I've had my fair share of a few. Look through my gallery before making an assumption. And have you ever thought that people just aren't interested in the topic I wrote about?sorry if I sound arrogant, as beauty is in the eye of the beholder, but calling my writing rubbish, or at least alluding to it just set me off.
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Na it's cool, maybe a bit of advice on my part.

I do often just out right attack people when maybe sometimes I should just completely ignore them.

Want to attack my poems?

I'm really bored now and I have one particular poem that one has 1 comment that I would love a little review on... not really a review I just want a comment... what was it to you sort of thing.

precipitous120.deviantart.com/…
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TheGreatRayne12 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Forgive me for butting in, also for being rude, but, your comments are very pretentious.

I very much prefer this poem, and this poet, over your poetry. She may not have many comments, but she does have multiple, multiple, favorites.  I like it, so does the 62+ people who favorited.
Im just saying, if the amount of people who view, comment, or fave changed her talent. She would still have more talent then you.
I have many more page views on my profile than you, so I have more talent?
"artist with great tastes",that's what your profile says, once again, pretentious.
I've seen too many pretentious comments on dA, where someone of less talent tries to correct someone with more talent.

sorry if this insulted you, but you insulted this poem and I like the poem so I'm also slightly insulted. Please don't take this as me offending you, it just bugged me, a lot. 
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
ok, ok, I never said that the poem is good according to the comments.

All I said is that because the poem isn't as good as it could be, people come to your page look at it and leave... that is what I meant at least. I wasn't an attack, If I had the same problem on my page I would want to know it, so I was simple saying... look you have a problem, this is what I think it is... we all start some where, I understand why people can't or can create certain types of art... it all has to do with growing up in our ability or talent, and we never truly stop growing up.

O, by the way... that comment on my profile page... you cut it short on purpose didn't you, just to make me look bad.

I said I am an amateur artist with great taste.

Meaning I may suck at art, but I can see what is good and what isn't
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TheGreatRayne12 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I didn't mean to start a fight, I was trying to keep this as civil as possible, your comment was rather rude, the end. Goodbye, have a great day, hope my "problem" didn't ruin your day. 
because I have a problem, of course! it's me! ha, haha 
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
na, nothing can touch me because I'm the GREATEST POET EVER!!!!

Lol, well have a good day... or rather I wish you a good day as well!
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Precipitous120 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
O sorry forgot to add, that we all start from some where... the fact that this poem isn't good doesn't mean you should give up. I produced plenty of rubbish poems I thought were great, poems that took a lot of effort but weren't really good. Now poems are easy but I couldn't be bothered to add effort into them
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is so touching, i love it and it is so well done. 
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lidsworth Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks!!!!
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
np! wish to read a poem i made? 
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